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So my mind has been racing for a few days, and I decided to write this on a whim. What do you think?
Fury.
The world is burning.
Fire. It is an animal. All consuming flame, it eats in a desperate bid to fill itself. Fire is a state of being, hatred without substance, energy in empty space. It burns and burns and consumes and takes all from around it, and its hunger is never satisfied, its thirst never sated.
You are fire. You are killing us, killing them, and killing everyone around you. How long must you seek vengeance? What crime was so heinous that you must destroy everyone between you and him?
Your thirst for violence and death will never be quenched. All the world will drown in the blood you have spilt, and still it won’t satisfy you. You don’t want justice, you want revenge. And you will kill us all.
He is not the villain in this story, you are. And you will not leave this place until you realize that.
You are blind, Saphira.
And I will make you see.
...That’s interesting. It would make a lovely spitefic if you explained more of what was happening…
What
It’s well-written, but also a tad confusing. I think it needs more detail after “I will make you see.”
I’ll write a big update when I get home, but for now, some background information:
I’m thinking about doing an Eragon rewrite.
This exchange is between Eragon and Saphira in book 2 (when they’re training with Oromis).
Eragon has learned that Saphira engineered the war between the Varden and the Empire, because Saphira wants revenge on Shuriken.
Eragon is confronting her on this because she believes that the death of thousands of people is justified.
Saphira is also heavily influenced by Kreia (KotOR II). Take from that what you will.
That makes sense, and the excerpt looks better in light of that information, but it should all be in the excerpt. Good writing can only go so far.
Kreia (KotOR II)
Bounces up and down in seat
Sounds interesting! I hope the project goes well.
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