Not signed in (Sign In)

Categories

Vanilla 1.1.8 is a product of Lussumo. More Information: Documentation, Community Support.

Welcome Guest!
Want to take part in these discussions? If you have an account, sign in now.
If you don't have an account, apply for one now.

Writing: Nagasaki Moon

Bottom of Page

1 to 100 of 168

  1. <
  2. 1
  3. 2
  4. >
  1.  

    It is (sort of) done!

    The whole thing

    At someone’s urging, I started this story thread that everyone at II could help me write. So just put down chapter overviews and such as we can go in with dialog, details etc later.

    Premise: It was a dream come true for Anie, she had wanted to visit Japan as long as she could remember. Making friends with a hot British guy named Jack, also visiting Japan, is just a bonus. But Jack hides a terrible secret. He and his family are an ancient clan of vampires, experimented on by the U.S. military in the 70s and given cyborg parts. They are now in Japan to try and get these parts fixed. But Japan is protected by a centuries old clan of werewolves who have mastered the art of ninjitsu and they don’t like vampires.

    Now Anie is caught in this war, even as her own terrible, forgotten secret is rising…

    *********************************************************************************
    (grats to SlyShy for the title, there is a reason he’s our fearless leader)
    Sorry Dan, no time travel. That’s just silly for our srs work here. (we’ll put it in book 2 or 3)

    Voting for Steph’s secret (unless there are any more nominations).

    1) she’s a werewolf who hasn’t grown into her powers yet
    2) Her tourist guide dad is actually the undead warlock responsible for the military experiments, and is also behind the vampire/werewolf war!
    3) she is of an ancient family of pirates, sworn to visit death upon both ninjas AND werewolves! AND cyborgs.
    4) she’s a dragon
    5) ____________________

    •  
      CommentAuthorswenson
    • CommentTimeJun 5th 2009
     

    Call it “Rising Sun”. You know- Japan is the Land of the Rising Sun, Rising Sun is the opposite of Twilight…?

  3.  

    Wasn’t that a title of a Michael Chriton book?

  4.  

    You so did not just use my name. Wait… this is a reference to Improve Twilight. I will go read that thread in a sec. Okay, permission to use my name as an in-joke = granted.

    I like swenson’s idea, only it reminds me of a trashy romance. Whereas this will be a ‘trashy comedy’, won’t it?
    Okay, okay, not trashy, sheesh.

    How about ‘Trade Secrets’?

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeJun 5th 2009
     

    So, where are the cowboy pirates and zombies riding raptors?
    I like romantic comedies with undead.

    • CommentAuthorSlyShy
    • CommentTimeJun 5th 2009
     

    Nagasaki Moon.

  7.  
    Eargh... change it back to 'Steph'. Please.
  8.  

    Names adjusted. And I’d like to think this is a trashy romance mixed with 7 KINDS OF AWESOME!

    I’ll be waiting for my movie deal too.

  9.  
    Well, if two of our favourite series can get movie deals...
    No, seriously, I bet someone does.
    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeJun 5th 2009 edited
     

    Steph>Stef.
    And why does Jack/Morgan/Scott’s name keep changing?

  11.  

    double post

    Thanks for the name changes, but you’re not going to make me fall in love with someone named JACK are you? I’d rather… Earnest. There’s something in that name… Something that inspires absolute confidence… It produces… vibrations...

  12.  

    Because I keep changing my mind Moldorm!

    Now quit obsessing over something that will probably change even more and help me figure out the girl’s terrible secret.
    (she’s the reincarnation of a famous Kaiju! no that’s dull)

  13.  

    Twist: she’s actually a werewolf who hasn’t grown into her powers yet!

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeJun 5th 2009
     

    Her tourist guide dad is actually the undead warlock responsible for the military experiments, and is also behind the vampire/werewolf war!

  15.  

    Come on, SOMEBODY’s gotta get that reference…

    •  
      CommentAuthorswenson
    • CommentTimeJun 5th 2009
     

    Steph’s deep dark secret is that she is of an ancient family of pirates, sworn to visit death upon both ninjas AND werewolves! AND cyborgs. They were very generalistic pirates.

    •  
      CommentAuthorOverlordDan
    • CommentTimeJun 5th 2009 edited
     

    Warning: Does not make sense :D

    She is in fact a time-traveling pirate from the future who has come to the future in order to stop the past from happening. On arrival, her device was stolen by Shingeki Greg, Samuri of the ancient clan known only as Ramen. With her machine gone, She had no choice but to flbrty giberty goo.

    Sorry, I’m a bit tired :(

  18.  

    Wow. I had no idea my life was so complicated.

    (has anyone ever heard of Oscar Wilde? hint hint)

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeJun 5th 2009
     

    Makes about as much sense as the plot of Sonic 360…

  20.  

    There’s an idea I’ve had floating around in my head for awhile, never really found a place to put it. How about here?

    Steph is really the secreted offspring of the ancient, tyrannical dragon emperor (who was a real dragon). Returning to her inheritance has begun to awaken her true, fearsome identity. (yep, she’s a bitch at times because she’s also a royal dragon)

  21.  

    Oh, you are so going down!

  22.  

    (notes and changes will be posted on the original post)

  23.  

    The Improve Twilight thread? Winchestra doth confuseth me.

  24.  

    Oh, you are so going down!

    Are you getting offended? Why? This is so obviously not about you!

    The Improve Twilight thread? Winchestra doth confuseth me.

    The top of this thread you fool!

  25.  

    Am I a white fool?

  26.  

    We’ll decide what race you are later, i mean, what does that matter in light of your TERRIBLE SECRET?

  27.  

    Gee. I can hardly wait. Um. I killed his father, and many others. because I have a Jekyll/Hyde potion?

    Hey, this could work… And each clan can think that the other clan is killing all their people off, when in reality it’s me!

    The foreshadowing for this could be unbelieveable! What a plot twist!

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeJun 5th 2009
     

    Maybe she has a vampire/werewolf potion.

  29.  

    Hmmm…. she’s “adaptable”. If she drinks Vamp blood, she takes on the traits of vampires, but if she drinks werewolf blood she becomes wolfy. (and is able to go back and forth)

    Not bad Moldorm. Does anyone want to claim this story for NaNoWriMo or am I stuck with it?

  30.  

    You mean you don’t want to write it?

  31.  

    Well… I guess I can take a break from my new year’s resolution for July and hash this out. (just being generous)

  32.  

    Lol, if you would. What’s wrong with July?

  33.  

    I thought July was NaNoWriMO.

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeJun 9th 2009
     

    No, it’s JulNoWriMo! It’s completely different!

    I would claim this idea, if I hadn’t just thought of one of my own.

  35.  

    I’m explaining it to him, gently, in a whisper, Moldy. Just so we don’t get all confuzzled.

  36.  

    I’m so confuzzled!

    Screw it, I’m writing this thing in July. Will be a millionaire in September…

  37.  

    I bags half the profits for inspiring you and kicking your butt into doing this…

    Or at least a tiny mention in the acknowledgements.

    Hey, if I write the musical for this, I’ll have money, too!

    ...Or a script! This could be Donnie Darko III.

  38.  

    Hey, if I write the musical for this, I’ll have money, too!

    yay!

    ...Or a script! This could be Donnie Darko III.

    boo!

  39.  

    Okay, okay. Musical. I getcha. But I need something to work with first, you know.

  40.  

    I’m going to see about starting on it tonight and posting chapters and such to here as I finish them. However I could use 2 more people to help edit the grammar. (and catch really REALLY big errors, the rest I’ll let II enjoy in full)

    •  
      CommentAuthorswenson
    • CommentTimeJun 9th 2009 edited
     

    I’ll help check it over. You going to whisper it to me or you want my email? (stalkerrr…)

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeJun 10th 2009
     

    I’m looking forward to reading it.

  43.  
    Same.
  44.  

    So am I, believe me!

  45.  

    Thanks to Steph & Swenson for the editing. The prologue is now up on the first post.

  46.  

    Our pleasure.

    •  
      CommentAuthorswenson
    • CommentTimeJun 15th 2009
     

    Heehee. I like this story.

  48.  

    I haven’t even had a chance to see the finished prologue yet!

  49.  

    Chapter 1 is now up for those bored enough to care.

  50.  

    ho hum…

    EDIT AFTER READING: Aww! It’s so good! (although, looking back over it, you probably could’ve left ‘stuttering’ in. Sorry.)

  51.  

    Aww! It’s so good!

    Thanks to my lovely and talented editors!
    (though if I ever do an Eragon parody, I’ll of course spit it out without editing)

  52.  

    Just like a certain CP…

  53.  

    Where’d you post it?

  54.  

    The book & writings will be posted at the top of the first post as they become available.
    (i guess I made it TOO easy to find lol)

  55.  

    Question: Have you actually plotted this out or are you writing it as it comes?

  56.  

    I do a little bit of both. I have a general idea of where I want everyone to end up but I’m letting the characters choose how they want to get there.

  57.  

    We’ve managed to pick up another editor so some things should speed along now.

    Chapter 2 NOW AVAILABLE

  58.  
  59.  

    One last bump.

    Chapter 4 enjoy!

  60.  
    I know I'm ridiculously late, but I totally got that Oscar Wilde reference.

    I adore Wilde's writing.
    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 4th 2009
     

    And here I thought this had at least some srs in it.. I was sorely mistaken.

  62.  

    You disappointed or happy Virgil?

    Besides, read a bit and give it a chance. I try to surprise people.
    (and it has some srs funny!)

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 4th 2009
     

    Kind of in between. But ultimately happy. I will read and participate. =D

  64.  

    You’re in luck Virgil, Chapter 4 is where I begin cranking it up to 11…

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 4th 2009
     

    Cranking what up to 11? The srs?

  66.  

    Read and find out.

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 4th 2009
     

    Ok.. [closes his browser and leaves the country]

    •  
      CommentAuthorJeni
    • CommentTimeAug 4th 2009
     

    Send us a postcard.

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 4th 2009
     

    [snaps a pic of Jeni’s place]

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 4th 2009
     

    I now see what you are cranking up to 11. I kinda vote for 3 or 4..

  71.  

    Well you got to build up properly Virgil.

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 4th 2009
     

    Built.. up… properly?

    •  
      CommentAuthorswenson
    • CommentTimeAug 5th 2009
     

    CHAPTER 5 IS AWESOME you poor saps who can’t read it yet…

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeAug 6th 2009
     

    I like how very much better than Twilight it is.

  75.  

    [whew] Thanks Moldorm. For a minute I was worried…

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeAug 6th 2009
     

    It has cyborg vampires, ninja werewolves and provides a good reason for the stalking!
    And the story is insufficiently badly written to lose out to Twilight.

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 6th 2009
     

    So whats with Ch 5?

  78.  

    You’ll see when the editors finish.

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeAug 6th 2009
     

    When will that be?

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 6th 2009
     

    Ooh, I wanna be an editor!

  81.  
    Lol, I'm so behind on my editing. Nate's gonna kill me.

    and, hmyd.windmere? THANKYOU!
    •  
      CommentAuthorswenson
    • CommentTimeAug 7th 2009
     

    Have you done Chapter 5 yet? Because I haven’t even begun to work on Chapter 6 yet…

    •  
      CommentAuthorMoldorm
    • CommentTimeAug 7th 2009
     

    Work harder! Faster!
    ...how hard can it be?

  84.  
    Steph, you're welcome. :D

    ...now I'm looking for a good quote to reference. It should make sense. Your reference was perfect, considering the names.
  85.  

    glows

  86.  

    At long last, Chapter 5 has arrived.

    Hopefully 6 & 7 will be up soon. Though I am suffering from both writer’s block and option paralysis for chapter 8. (plus, a lot of my work on it was recently lost making me even angrier)

    Looks like one of my editors bailed so if you’re interested in being one…

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 19th 2009
     

    raises hand

  88.  

    I warn you Virgil…

    1) You must swear to secrecy. No showing the chapters to everyone until they are released.
    2) Make an effort. Swenson and Steph give me lots of good feedback for improvement.

    Also if people grow restless waiting for a chapter, I’ll rat you out if we’re waiting on you. ;-)

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 19th 2009
     

    Fair enough.

  90.  

    COMMA, NATE, COMMA!!!!!

    It should be

    I warn you, Virgil…

    NOT

    I warn you Virgil…

    How many times, Nate? Commas ALWAYS go before proper names!!!

    Okay, I’m going to go get started on editing ch6 now…

    •  
      CommentAuthorswenson
    • CommentTimeAug 20th 2009
     

    Commas always go around separate clauses! GAHHHH!!! dies

  92.  

    As, you, can, see, Virgil. Editing, also, has, a, tendency, to, drive, some, mad.

  93.  

    Right, anybody seen that fabled Comma Monster? I think I’ve found it something to eat. What say you, swenson?

  94.  

    I,m, t,r,y,i,n,g, t,o, b,a,i,t, i,t,.

    S,h,h,h,h,h,h,

    •  
      CommentAuthorswenson
    • CommentTimeAug 20th 2009
     

    Agreed! Set the beast loose in Nate’s direction!

  96.  

    Looking at my original post and seeing some of the things I said…

    I just realized that I lied.

    About what? You’ll see… bwhahahahaha

  97.  

    Right-oh, swennie!
    sets beast loose

  98.  

    Special thanks to Virgil for helping get chapter 6 up and ready.

    •  
      CommentAuthorVirgil
    • CommentTimeAug 20th 2009
     

    I feel appreciated! :3

  100.  

    Chapter 7 is now available.

    This one may have to hold both of my fans for a bit as I’m still angry over what I lost with 8 and will need a break before I can resume work on it.

1 to 100 of 168

  1. <
  2. 1
  3. 2
  4. >