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It is (sort of) done!
At someone’s urging, I started this story thread that everyone at II could help me write. So just put down chapter overviews and such as we can go in with dialog, details etc later.
Premise: It was a dream come true for Anie, she had wanted to visit Japan as long as she could remember. Making friends with a hot British guy named Jack, also visiting Japan, is just a bonus. But Jack hides a terrible secret. He and his family are an ancient clan of vampires, experimented on by the U.S. military in the 70s and given cyborg parts. They are now in Japan to try and get these parts fixed. But Japan is protected by a centuries old clan of werewolves who have mastered the art of ninjitsu and they don’t like vampires.
Now Anie is caught in this war, even as her own terrible, forgotten secret is rising…
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(grats to SlyShy for the title, there is a reason he’s our fearless leader)
Sorry Dan, no time travel. That’s just silly for our srs work here. (we’ll put it in book 2 or 3)
Voting for Steph’s secret (unless there are any more nominations).
1) she’s a werewolf who hasn’t grown into her powers yet
2) Her tourist guide dad is actually the undead warlock responsible for the military experiments, and is also behind the vampire/werewolf war!
3) she is of an ancient family of pirates, sworn to visit death upon both ninjas AND werewolves! AND cyborgs.
4) she’s a dragon
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Call it “Rising Sun”. You know- Japan is the Land of the Rising Sun, Rising Sun is the opposite of Twilight…?
Wasn’t that a title of a Michael Chriton book?
You so did not just use my name. Wait… this is a reference to Improve Twilight. I will go read that thread in a sec. Okay, permission to use my name as an in-joke = granted.
I like swenson’s idea, only it reminds me of a trashy romance. Whereas this will be a ‘trashy comedy’, won’t it?
Okay, okay, not trashy, sheesh.
How about ‘Trade Secrets’?
So, where are the cowboy pirates and zombies riding raptors?
I like romantic comedies with undead.
Nagasaki Moon.
Names adjusted. And I’d like to think this is a trashy romance mixed with 7 KINDS OF AWESOME!
I’ll be waiting for my movie deal too.
Steph>Stef.
And why does Jack/Morgan/Scott’s name keep changing?
double post
Thanks for the name changes, but you’re not going to make me fall in love with someone named JACK are you? I’d rather… Earnest. There’s something in that name… Something that inspires absolute confidence… It produces… vibrations...
Because I keep changing my mind Moldorm!
Now quit obsessing over something that will probably change even more and help me figure out the girl’s terrible secret.
(she’s the reincarnation of a famous Kaiju! no that’s dull)
Twist: she’s actually a werewolf who hasn’t grown into her powers yet!
Her tourist guide dad is actually the undead warlock responsible for the military experiments, and is also behind the vampire/werewolf war!
Come on, SOMEBODY’s gotta get that reference…
Steph’s deep dark secret is that she is of an ancient family of pirates, sworn to visit death upon both ninjas AND werewolves! AND cyborgs. They were very generalistic pirates.
Warning: Does not make sense :D
She is in fact a time-traveling pirate from the future who has come to the future in order to stop the past from happening. On arrival, her device was stolen by Shingeki Greg, Samuri of the ancient clan known only as Ramen. With her machine gone, She had no choice but to flbrty giberty goo.
Sorry, I’m a bit tired :(
Wow. I had no idea my life was so complicated.
(has anyone ever heard of Oscar Wilde? hint hint)
Makes about as much sense as the plot of Sonic 360…
There’s an idea I’ve had floating around in my head for awhile, never really found a place to put it. How about here?
Steph is really the secreted offspring of the ancient, tyrannical dragon emperor (who was a real dragon). Returning to her inheritance has begun to awaken her true, fearsome identity. (yep, she’s a bitch at times because she’s also a royal dragon)
Oh, you are so going down!
(notes and changes will be posted on the original post)
The Improve Twilight thread? Winchestra doth confuseth me.
Oh, you are so going down!
Are you getting offended? Why? This is so obviously not about you!
The Improve Twilight thread? Winchestra doth confuseth me.
The top of this thread you fool!
Am I a white fool?
We’ll decide what race you are later, i mean, what does that matter in light of your TERRIBLE SECRET?
Gee. I can hardly wait. Um. I killed his father, and many others. because I have a Jekyll/Hyde potion?
Hey, this could work… And each clan can think that the other clan is killing all their people off, when in reality it’s me!
The foreshadowing for this could be unbelieveable! What a plot twist!
Maybe she has a vampire/werewolf potion.
Hmmm…. she’s “adaptable”. If she drinks Vamp blood, she takes on the traits of vampires, but if she drinks werewolf blood she becomes wolfy. (and is able to go back and forth)
Not bad Moldorm. Does anyone want to claim this story for NaNoWriMo or am I stuck with it?
You mean you don’t want to write it?
Well… I guess I can take a break from my new year’s resolution for July and hash this out. (just being generous)
Lol, if you would. What’s wrong with July?
I thought July was NaNoWriMO.
No, it’s JulNoWriMo! It’s completely different!
I would claim this idea, if I hadn’t just thought of one of my own.
I’m explaining it to him, gently, in a whisper, Moldy. Just so we don’t get all confuzzled.
I’m so confuzzled!
Screw it, I’m writing this thing in July. Will be a millionaire in September…
I bags half the profits for inspiring you and kicking your butt into doing this…
Or at least a tiny mention in the acknowledgements.
Hey, if I write the musical for this, I’ll have money, too!
...Or a script! This could be Donnie Darko III.
Hey, if I write the musical for this, I’ll have money, too!
yay!
...Or a script! This could be Donnie Darko III.
boo!
Okay, okay. Musical. I getcha. But I need something to work with first, you know.
I’m going to see about starting on it tonight and posting chapters and such to here as I finish them. However I could use 2 more people to help edit the grammar. (and catch really REALLY big errors, the rest I’ll let II enjoy in full)
I’ll help check it over. You going to whisper it to me or you want my email? (stalkerrr…)
I’m looking forward to reading it.
So am I, believe me!
Thanks to Steph & Swenson for the editing. The prologue is now up on the first post.
Our pleasure.
Heehee. I like this story.
I haven’t even had a chance to see the finished prologue yet!
Chapter 1 is now up for those bored enough to care.
ho hum…
EDIT AFTER READING: Aww! It’s so good! (although, looking back over it, you probably could’ve left ‘stuttering’ in. Sorry.)
Aww! It’s so good!
Thanks to my lovely and talented editors!
(though if I ever do an Eragon parody, I’ll of course spit it out without editing)
Just like a certain CP…
Where’d you post it?
The book & writings will be posted at the top of the first post as they become available.
(i guess I made it TOO easy to find lol)
Question: Have you actually plotted this out or are you writing it as it comes?
I do a little bit of both. I have a general idea of where I want everyone to end up but I’m letting the characters choose how they want to get there.
We’ve managed to pick up another editor so some things should speed along now.
One last bump.
Chapter 4 enjoy!
And here I thought this had at least some srs in it.. I was sorely mistaken.
You disappointed or happy Virgil?
Besides, read a bit and give it a chance. I try to surprise people.
(and it has some srs funny!)
Kind of in between. But ultimately happy. I will read and participate. =D
You’re in luck Virgil, Chapter 4 is where I begin cranking it up to 11…
Cranking what up to 11? The srs?
Read and find out.
Ok.. [closes his browser and leaves the country]
Send us a postcard.
[snaps a pic of Jeni’s place]
I now see what you are cranking up to 11. I kinda vote for 3 or 4..
Well you got to build up properly Virgil.
Built.. up… properly?
CHAPTER 5 IS AWESOME you poor saps who can’t read it yet…
I like how very much better than Twilight it is.
[whew] Thanks Moldorm. For a minute I was worried…
It has cyborg vampires, ninja werewolves and provides a good reason for the stalking!
And the story is insufficiently badly written to lose out to Twilight.
So whats with Ch 5?
You’ll see when the editors finish.
When will that be?
Ooh, I wanna be an editor!
Have you done Chapter 5 yet? Because I haven’t even begun to work on Chapter 6 yet…
Work harder! Faster!
...how hard can it be?
glows
At long last, Chapter 5 has arrived.
Hopefully 6 & 7 will be up soon. Though I am suffering from both writer’s block and option paralysis for chapter 8. (plus, a lot of my work on it was recently lost making me even angrier)
Looks like one of my editors bailed so if you’re interested in being one…
raises hand
I warn you Virgil…
1) You must swear to secrecy. No showing the chapters to everyone until they are released.
2) Make an effort. Swenson and Steph give me lots of good feedback for improvement.
Also if people grow restless waiting for a chapter, I’ll rat you out if we’re waiting on you. ;-)
Fair enough.
COMMA, NATE, COMMA!!!!!
It should be
I warn you, Virgil…
NOT
I warn you Virgil…
How many times, Nate? Commas ALWAYS go before proper names!!!
Okay, I’m going to go get started on editing ch6 now…
Commas always go around separate clauses! GAHHHH!!! dies
As, you, can, see, Virgil. Editing, also, has, a, tendency, to, drive, some, mad.
Right, anybody seen that fabled Comma Monster? I think I’ve found it something to eat. What say you, swenson?
I,m, t,r,y,i,n,g, t,o, b,a,i,t, i,t,.
S,h,h,h,h,h,h,
Agreed! Set the beast loose in Nate’s direction!
Looking at my original post and seeing some of the things I said…
I just realized that I lied.
About what? You’ll see… bwhahahahaha
Right-oh, swennie!
sets beast loose
Special thanks to Virgil for helping get chapter 6 up and ready.
I feel appreciated! :3
This one may have to hold both of my fans for a bit as I’m still angry over what I lost with 8 and will need a break before I can resume work on it.